Shattered

Raivyn

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03:55am Wed, Jul 24, 2013

There are no colors
She sees no light
Only dark passions
Only black and white
As she seeks to find
The forbidden truth
She looks upon
A shattered youth
She knows the end
Is getting nearer
For she has looked
Into a shattered mirror

Bunny

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Ha ha love the slant rhyme at the end

Aria

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Wow, this was so good!

I loved the ending and how it tied it all together.

LadyLuck7

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Very nice work. Liked your style although its a little dark. Makes you actually feel the words and that gives it power.

Djeinus

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I really like it and I must echo the others' feelings about the ending.

Raivyn

Growing Baby Bunny

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LadyLuck7 (01:45pm Wed, Jul 24, 2013)
Very nice work. Liked your style although its a little dark. Makes you actually feel the words and that gives it power.

Thank you. I wrote this in Junior High when I was going through a phase where I felt alone and abandoned by everybody and everything, so I channeled those feelings into it.

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